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Sunday, October 16, 2011

Falling

This post is a haibun, which is a form that blends poetry and prose.  You can read more of them, and more about them, on Margo's prompt.


I was cantering in the arena -- balanced, smooth and relaxed.  Three strides before the corner, Jackson bucked.  Caught unaware and unprepared, I was tossed to the side of the saddle.  As I scrambled back up, the next buck lifted me further off balance.  I let go, pushing myself away from his shoulder and dropping to the ground.  The sand was hard.  It hurt.  Jackson slid to a confused stop and stared at me with questioning dark eyes.

You chose the other;
The wife and children, the known.
I let you go.


I have submitted this poem to The Gooseberry Garden Poetry Picnic.  Check out the other submissions. 

And, thank you very much to the Poets Rally for this award! 


18 comments:

Anonymous said...

Wow. You really understand the relationship between the narrative and the haiku. I'm bookmarking yours, should I need another example.

margo

Allison said...

Such pretty poetry, always. I ought to try my hand at writing more often. There was a time I wrote notebooks full of poetry and prose, and then something happened and I hardly dare to now. I sit, scrunched up and moist, inside this shell-house.

How happy you made me when you said you'd made the recipe!! I laughed thinking of you all licking up your plates (!), and though you say you used bread, my own husband grew up actually licking his!

You hugged my heart today. xoxo

Morning said...

wise choice.
well put.

The Orange Tree said...

this is impressive.

cheers.

Aynsley (Life In Verse) said...

Wow...
Oh wow...
This is possibly the best haiku I have ever read.
Amazing... left me breathless.
I am humbled by your words.

teri said...

So glad to see how to do Margo's prompt- really lovely and wise.

Ann LeFlore said...

I am always amazed at your blog and your poetry I so enjoy coming here to see your entries
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/18/mirror-of-truth/

Daydreamertoo said...

Awww the horse felt it had been let down. I think animals do have feelings which they can only show in certain ways.
Very nice write.

Kay said...

Oh, this is very nice!

Cindy eksuzian said...

I like the contrast and commonality in your story of content especially the way you wove it in prose and poetry. Really nice!

mareymercy said...

beautiful ending!

tinkwelborn said...

Ha! I Love this piece! and I know about being bucked off of horses...I think I hold the world's record. LOL
the structure of this piece (Haibun?) is very cool.
thanks.

The Orange Tree said...

neat.

Anonymous said...

Fine! It worked...
ZQ

Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall said...

profound Haiku.

Unknown said...

Glad to see someone "gets" horses.Very well structured.

Anonymous said...

the shortest poems linger longer. :) greetings.

Jingle Poetry At Olive Garden said...

How are you today?

Happy end of November!

Appreciated your support to our poetry picnic,

Hope to see you share today,

A random poem or old poem will do the wonders too.

Your talent rocks.

Hope to see you in.

xoxox

well deserved award, wow.

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