a rush of relief
as I listened to the news;
Brett stood at the shower door
his blue eyes
bright with tears.
Raw grief followed relief.
A day of tumbling tears -
remembering the pain
and the fear
and the loss.
Firemen and police
climbing the stairs
into smoke, fire
death.
My policeman husband
would have willingly gone.
I can't imagine.
But I do.
This poem has been submitted to the Thursday Poet's Rally
And it won an award! From the Promising Poets' Poetry Cafe Wow!! Thanks! And, check out my nomination for the award, JP's Poetry.
38 comments:
Sharp and sad. Thanks for sharing.
A horrible event, it was so sad.
Good poem.
The grief we all felt summed up in a nice remembrance.
Sad but beautiful.So poignant! Lovely in a very melancholy sort of way
Now I'm teary too. Really good writing.
thanks for helping us to remember a sad time as we think of Osama's last day. Nice tribute
Iris
My spirit watered without deliberation.
Thanks you
Genebrother
poignant
very well done.
fabulous word flow.
something that would be with all of us for many years to come...thanks for sharing and thanks for stopping by my page
You do have a way with words Annette. Beautifully written...such a reflection of your feelings.
Very moving, personal poem. Thank you for sharing!
You echo our hearts.
sad but beautiful thank you so much for sharing
Personal yet easy to identify with. Well written.
very heartfelt. genuine
I suppose this speaks of the closure... but also opens some wounds.
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heartfelt, raw and honest. Thank you for sharing
very good thought provoking and real- true poetry
wow!! You really captured the excitment and caution and worry in a fireman's wife .. and in the relative of someone in danger!!
cool!!
with warm regards
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I like how fragmented this poem is - it mirrors how fragmented the emotions are presented.
Powerfully said, and wonderfully wrought. It is a painful picture, but painted with hope, thank you.
You have truly conveyed all of the pain and emotion of that day succinctly, unadorned and true to the human condition.
Poignant...the fear is very evident in the words...well done...you are brave...
So poignant, beautiful tribute and memory
Congrats on the award! great poem.
beautiful. Thank you
nicely written. It must be a hard to thing for one to imagine.
my thursday post was here
http://blackswanpoetry.wordpress.com/2011/05/05/poem-can%e2%80%99t-believe-it%e2%80%99s-you/
awesome…………perfectly done.
Thanks…come to poetry potluck if you can, appreciate your input.
simple n touchin :)
http://collected-cryptics.blogspot.com/2011/04/random-mood-of-nothingness.html
Could feel your words. Poignant! Congratulations on your award! :)
My Poets Rally Poem
Those last two lines are very powerful, I know exactly what you mean. Very well done.
Quite sad, but poignant and beautiful. Thank you for sharing!
Thoughts captured, collected and shared-Your peice touched lots of hearts. Xo ter
I'm glad you mentioned your poem because I completely forgot to come back and read it. All I can say is I'm glad I did and wow! You deserved the award. Very well done.
Very clever and poignant. Thank you for sharing.
A fine piece of writing. I can't imagine being personally involved in such, and do admire the undermentioned bravery of the wives.
Great touching piece on the job of a fireman. Thanks for putting that into words.
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